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Fiancée
I shall not
be thwarted by her.
Instead,
I may be flustered under
the polished moon
who wishes
that I would not chew
my food so loudly.
Perhaps,
I will be dumfounded
by the cool sable
pavement
who desires
that I not criticize all
of existence.
Furthermore,
I could be muddled by
a cluster of
emerald reeds
who requests
that I cease any attempts
to save her
from the pond
in which she grows.
-Paul Whiting
(a.k.a., A Creative Writer)
"I maybe say too much about how life really is!"
My Writing Notes:
The reason that I wrote this poem can be summed up with the following statement: How this poem brings back memories!
The reason that I wrote this poem is because I was engaged to Sandra—who was my first and only girlfriend—to be married. (Although, I seriously don't recall how I proposed to her! Ah, what romance...) And she was seriously bothered by some of the things that I did: I would chew food loudly with my mouth open, and she actually had to teach me how not to do that; and I was always being so critical of everything and everyone; plus, I was trying to "save her" from her family, even though they were "the pond in which she grows."
Therefore, the phrase "I shall not be thwarted by her" was really code for "I can barely handle having to do all of this changing!"
Just so you know, I revised this poem, as I often do with my writing! And I changed how this poem was written when I was editing it on my "Paul Whiting — A Creative Writer" and "Small All White in the Forest" blogs. So, I wanted to show you how this poem used to be written, before I revised it as above.
And it used to be written like this:
Fiancée
I shall not
be thwarted by her.
Instead,
I may fluster under
the polished moon
that wishes
I would not chew
so loudly.
Perhaps,
I will be dumfounded
by the cool sable
pavement
which desires
I not criticize all
existence.
Furthermore,
I could be muddled by
a cluster of
emerald reeds which
requests that
I cease any attempts
to save her
from the pond
in which she grows.
Thus, I revised this poem to be written as it is above.
And this poem was also published on my "Small All White in the Forest" blog (please see the hyperlink below for the blog), since I feel that the message in this poem applies to the message that I am trying to convey through "Small All White in the Forest."
This poem was written in Salt Lake City, Utah.
-Paulee
https://smallallwhiteintheforest.blogspot.com
This "Paul Whiting — A Creative Writer" Post No. 017 was edited on September 7th, 2023.
"Poetry is using the fewest words possible in order to describe all that is possible to describe." –Paul Whiting [June 1st, 2022]
